There are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:

There are a few key areas of Dion's Personality we would like you to discuss for us:

1. Dion's relationship with his father, Sylvestre. Although you mentioned it briefly, the change Dion saw in his father affected how he handled things, so we'd like to see an expansion on that. Was it losing the throne, or was it seeing his father make unreasonable decisions that upset Dion? This is a large part of his character that can't be glossed over.
   
   
2. Dion's relationship with Terence. Again he is briefly mentioned, but we'd like to see more on how their relationship affected and influenced Dion's actions, such as touching on what he personally wants and what he sees as his duty. Who was Terence to him? This is another significant part of his character.
   
   
3. Dion's guilt vs. duty. Although touched on, this was not given enough depth as it should have. How does it progress especially after the events in the Crystal Dominion? How did Ultima's actions affect him? What about his acts for redemption? How does it contrast with his sense of duty?

Finally, we just wanted to make a note about Dion's Abilities. We noticed you listed all of his abilities, including ones that are only available to him while primed. Could you reorganize it and clarify which he can use in which state and which abilities will be available while in Escordvi? Along with any needed nerfs.

Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one. You have five (5) days to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. The deadline is September 10th, 11:59PM US Eastern Time. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!