There are a few things that either didn't quite meet our standards, were lacking, or incorrect. Fortunately we feel that this can be easily revised. Here are our concerns:
The current Personality section is very superficial. While it hits the main points, it does not provide any further explanation or details to help flesh out those traits, especially those that show there was major change and development. We suggest you try to expand on Fenris's personality using those questions provided for the application as a guide as covering those topics should help in fleshing out his character.
We would also like to see a long sample. You can continue tagging the current thread, but if you have threads from other sources such as memes or another game, we can look at those as well.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one; do not edit your original app. You have five (5) days to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. The deadline is May 15th, 11:59PM US Eastern Time. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!
REVISION
The current Personality section is very superficial. While it hits the main points, it does not provide any further explanation or details to help flesh out those traits, especially those that show there was major change and development. We suggest you try to expand on Fenris's personality using those questions provided for the application as a guide as covering those topics should help in fleshing out his character.
We would also like to see a long sample. You can continue tagging the current thread, but if you have threads from other sources such as memes or another game, we can look at those as well.
Please submit your revisions as its own comment in reply to this one; do not edit your original app. You have five (5) days to submit the revisions, otherwise we will consider it a revocation of your application. The deadline is May 15th, 11:59PM US Eastern Time. If you have any questions or concerns, ask away!